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Simple concept, reasonable execution - a step up for me on a technical level, in my opinion. I'm not super happy with the composition (it's a little too static for my liking) or the gear on the bottom, but overall I can't complain with the result, even if just as a learning experience. Critique is more than welcome on this - I think I raised my bar a bit on this one and would love to keep at it.

!!" X 14" acrylic on masonite.
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Ah I see! Ok well here is a critique then bare with me I am a bit long winded, also I really like this peice and am not trying to bash you in anyway, shape or form I am just trying to give you ideas for growth.

Composition: The Idea is most wicked first off. I really, really like the arch that the world, yellow gear, and the galaxy make. Those three things could be a composition all by themselves with just a little re-aranging. The moon and the other gear look a bit out of place but having an odd number of subjects in a peice is good because it tends to make it more interesting than if it were to be an even number. The best way to work though Composistion problems is to do a series of rough sketches of the Idea. The sketches should take no longer than five seconds each and should not be recognizeable to anyone else looking at them. Lay the sketches out (you should have at least five but the more you have the better of a composition you are likely to get) and pick the one that looks most pleasing to the eye (remeber you shouldn't really be able to tell what they are). After you select one do another series of the particular arangement you picked out (these can be slightly more detailed but again should not take to long). Lay them out and pick out another one. Then do a more finished sketch before transfering it on the the final canvas (or whatever you are using). You can repeat the series thing as many times as you feel is necicary to get a really killer composistion (this also keeps you from having the paint lines form things you took out of the compostion show thought the peice). The more times you do this the less and less time you will have to spend working out the composition. It may even get to the point were you don't have to go thought that process anymore.

Acrylic Stuff: First off when you use acrylic you don't have to use gesso (you probabmu already knew this but *shugs* in case you didn't) the gesso just keeps whatever you are painting on from eating up the paint so quickly (that means you can use less pigment filled paint wich is more expensive than gesso). When aplying it if you use a sponge and swipe it leaves less brush marks than a brush does. Also since you dont have to worry about the paint eating your canvas (chipboard whatever) you can put less coats on. This makes it smoother to paint on. (sry if you already knew that). Since acrylic drys so fast it is best to normally work in layers. If you do this it keeps you form having borders around your subjects (you didn't have too much of a problem with this but it keeps the uneveness you get form the paint when you are working on the smooth surface from looking calculated making the background be indipendant istead of dependant on the subjects of the peice.

Lighting and color: For the most part your lighting is really good. On the stars in the background if you put a little bit of an aura around them (very very little) it tends to make them look more like stars and less like you dropped your paint brush. Also when things in the background are darker in apearance than the things in the forground it gives the peice a more 3-D look (for examples I suggest checking out *AquaSixio . He is a digital artist but he has animations of his stuff and you can work the same way in traditional mediums. I am in the process of doing one in his style and so far it is working most excelently). Color wize, when you repeat colors thought the peice it makes it feel more compositionally stable, so for example if you put a little bit of the green form the planet into the Galaxy and then maybe a little bit of the silver from the rusty wheel into the gold from the thing on the moon and the gold wheel, and added a few colors to the moon it's self the brown/silver gear and moon would feel more like they fit into the peice as aposed from operating apart from it. I think the clouds on the planet are awsome and the shading on the gold wheel is most wicked!

Now that I have said all that, if for anyreason you don't ever want me to critique you again just let me know and I won't. If you would still like critiques only you would like them to be less long winded I can do that too. If you did like the critique and you would like me to critique you again cool I dont have a problem with that either. If you didn't find any of that info useful at all sry I tried. So yea let me know I guess.

Hope that was in some way useful.

~Nine